From: Hoe Xin En
Date: 21st September 2016
Subject: Self-Introduction
Dear Brad,
I would like to take this opportunity to formally introduce myself. My name is Hoe Xin En. I graduated from Nanyang Polytechnic in 2016, with a diploma in Engineering Informatics.
Prior to the telematics degree I am pursuing, in the course of my study I learnt Enterprise Networking, Programming (C#), IT Services Operation Management and other modules related to smart objects. My specialization was networking as I preferred hands-on work, which required me to do cabling from routers to switches and making my very own network cables to be used in the projects given.
During my spare time, I love photography. It has been one of my interests since the age of 12. As my dad used to be a wedding photographer, I learned a thing or two from him. Since then, I have been taking photographs during special occasions to capture precious moments. I also enjoy playing sports such as badminton and pool. I play badminton and pool as regularly as once per week as it allows me to reduce stress from the hectic schedule I had.
My goals in SIT are to acquire proficient communication skills and gain as much knowledge related to telematics which will allow me to have a head start in the working industry. My aim for the future is to be a computer engineer which will allow me to develop and improve our technologies given to a higher scale using the skills I learnt in polytechnic and the telematics course to good use.
Thank you for taking your time to read this email and I look forward to improve my communication skills as well as learning new things each week.
Sincerely,
Xin En
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Commented on: Ian, Jie Lin.
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Edited on: 29 September 2016
Dear Xin En
ReplyDeleteI have enjoyed reading your post and am glad to be able to know you better through this post. The addition of the pictures are a fantastic way of portraying your passion with photography.
I truly believe that you will be able to achieve your goals in future.
Yours Sincerely
Ian Tan
Dear Ian,
DeleteThank for your kind comment! :)
Regards,
Xin En
Dear Xin En,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your post i believe i have a better understanding of you. Our goals are similar and i believe we can both achieve it ! We like the same sports so maybe one day we can play a game together.
Your Sincerely,
Jie Lin
Dear Jie Lin,
DeleteThank for your kind comment! Fix a date and we can play pool and badminton together! :)
Regards,
Xin En
Thanks very much, Xin En, for this very informative intro. It is clear, concise and yet detailed enough for us readers to have a better understanding of what makes you who you are. You seem 'well-rounded.' I'm especially interested in your interest in 'Smart Objects.' Not being an engineer, I wonder: Is that actually a field of study?
ReplyDeleteAlso, I am very happy to learn of your interest in photography, and I like the three you have posted. I can see a certain preference for 'realism' in these. There is an ongoing documentation project now at SIT which requires students with your talent and interest. Please speak to me about this. :)
Aside from the rich content of your letter, there is generally fluent language use. Here are a couple areas though that need a review:
1) ...from the busy schedule I had all week. >>> (verb tense)
2) My specialization is.... >>> (verb tense: Now or in poly?)
3) capitalization errors:
-- to be a Computer Engineer
-- the skills I learnt in Polytechnic and the Telematics course
-- specialization is Networking
4) one of my interest >>> one of my interestS
This criticism should not eclipse your fine effort.
Let's talk soon about the photography.