Pearl Rear Vision
According to the website "https://pearlauto.com/" (2016), Pearl Rear Vision is a wireless solar powered backup camera for cars designed to allow drivers with extensive vision of the car’s surroundings offering good visibility, safety and convenience with a smooth driving experience.
With state-of-the-art image processing of “high dynamic range scenes”, the rear view screen is clear under direct sunlight while the dark mode provides visibility in inferior light situation. It has a caution system which provides the driver with auricular and ocular alerts when there are obstructions to the lane caused by incoming traffic. This alert may be in the form of an undulation or intonation which becomes firmer as obstacles are in closer proximity.
Aside from the rear view camera being readily installed on the car’s number plate, it is also theft proof and uses RearVision application on the mobile as a rear view screen. Setting up of the system can be done within minutes as it does not require professional installation, allowing devices to be put in place at one's convenience.
Being one of the newest rear view cameras to be launched with similar products out on the market, Pearl Rear Vision is one of the rising products that differentiate from its competitors with outstanding features. The camera's field of view allows a perspective of 180 degrees wide. In contrast to its competitor, TadiBrothers introduced a product named 'TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera' which works similarly to the Pearl Rear Vision. However, it only allows a camera view of 120 degrees, giving drivers a disadvantage. When reversing, one would prefer to have the widest view possible. In this case, Pearl Rear Vision has observed the needs better than the TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera.
Another contributing feature is the usage of mobile as the rear view camera. With the support of wireless connection, mobiles can be used as a substitute, replacing the need of a fixed camera screen provided by the manufacturer. Drivers will have a choice to use personal devices where they are more familiarity, in contrary to the wireless camera by TadiBrothers only having the choice in usage of their specified camera screen.
In any case of emergency braking situations or blind spots of the rear view, Pearl Rear Vision comes with an alert system that provides audio and vision cautions to aid drivers. TadiBrother's wireless camera lacks of such technology in the system. Pearl Rear Vision has managed to capture this aspect that similar market products lack of, bringing attention to small details.
All these features shows that Pearl Rear Vision is an outstanding product that enables drivers to have a fuss-free experience and boosts efficiency as the driver is able to concentrate on the road, minimizing potential car accidents. Each of these features shows that as the application and device is constantly updated, it would be a successful device in the long run.
References:
Pearl Rear Vision. (2016) Retrieved from https://pearlauto.com/
TadiBrothers. (n.d) Retrieved from http://www.tadibrothers.com/products/7-monitor-with-wireless-license-plate-backup-camera#productTab_specs
Best Rear View Camera Reviews. (2016) Retrieved from http://www.toptenreviews.com/home/auto/best-rear-view-cameras/
Comments, Part 1
ReplyDeleteThank you, Xin En, for your effort with this assignment. You have provided a clear and concise product description, even though it would be better to house all of that 'summary' within one paragraph. What you need to work on is the specific controlling idea of your thesis, placement of the thesis in the essay, and the way each body paragraphs (and each one's respective topic sentence) connects to back the thesis. You have lots of relevant info, but you need to reorganize it for cohesion.
Please consider these points as well:
1) ...designed to allow drivers with extensive vision of the car’s surroundings offering good visibility, safety and convenience with a smooth driving experience. >>> (odd phrasing)
Do you mean this?
...designed to allow drivers more extensive vision of the car’s surroundings while offering good visibility, safety and convenience with a smooth driving experience.
2) ...in inferior light situation. >>> in AN inferior light situation. >>> Why? You need a/an, the, or a plural when presenting count nouns such as "situation."
3) to the lane >>> Which lane?
4) RearVision application >>> the RearVision application
5) Setting up of the system >>> Setting up the system
6) Being one of the newest rear view cameras to be launched with similar products out on the market, Pearl Rear Vision is one of the newest rear view cameras that differentiate from its competitors with outstanding features. >>> There is some repetitiveness in this thesis: one of the newest rear view cameras / one of the newest rear view cameras
6.1) Is your controlling idea "outstanding features"? What are those that will be discussed in this essay? You might be able to include them in your thesis: feature 1 (say, field of view), feature 2, feature 3
7) that differentiate >>> (wrong verb form: make passive)
see https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/539/01/
8) In contrast to its competitor, TadiBrothers introduced a product named 'TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera' which works similarly to the Pearl Rear Vision.
>>>
phrasing? Check this out:
In contrast, its competitor, TadiBrothers, introduced a product named 'TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera,' which works similarly to the Pearl Rear Vision.
9) The camera's field of view allows a perspective of 180 degrees wide. In contrast to its competitor, TadiBrothers introduced a product named 'TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera' which works similarly to the Pearl Rear Vision. However, it only allows a camera view of 120 degrees, giving drivers a disadvantage. When reversing, one would prefer to have the widest view possible. In this case, Pearl Rear Vision has observed the needs better than the TadiBrothers Wireless License Plate Camera.
>>> If this info was placed in its own paragraph, what would be the topic sentence? (Maybe you need to create one.)
10) Another contributing feature is the usage of mobile as the rear view camera. >>> This is a good topic sentence, but I think the main feature is not "rear view camera" but "rear view camera screen within the car." Is that correct?
Comments, Part 2
ReplyDelete11) where they are more familiarity >>> (wrong phrasing)
12) Drivers will have a choice to use personal devices where they are more familiarity, in contrary to the wireless camera by TadiBrothers only having the choice in usage of their specified camera screen. >>> poor wording >>> in contrary (Huh? we discussed this in class: don't you remember?)
13) In any case of emergency braking situations or blind spots of the rear view.... >>> (wrong phrasing)
14) lacks of such technology >>> lacks such technology
15) of, bringing attention to small details. >>> ???
16) All these features shows... >>> (subject verb disagreement)
17) the application and device is ... >>> (subject verb disagreement)
18) ...it would be a successful device in the long run. >>> Is that enough? Successful? Maybe you should end with a comparative judgement.
20) Shouldn't your reference list be alphabetized? ? some details in the APA are not correct....
Let's work on this.